Wednesday, December 15, 2010

I feel an Oscar... or even a Raspberry Award!

Ta da!! here is the final version of the script!!, hope you like it!

Crime Serial
1st Scene- Young married couple, husband humming and sound of a bleep from a mobile phone in the background. We hear quick footsteps.
Jessica: Simon? Simon! What the hell is this?!
Simon: What Jess?
Jessica: All these messages... to Cassandra?!
Simon: Oh, it’s just work stuff.
Jessica: Oh... I never realised another woman telling you what she wants to do to you, is part of being an accountant!
Simon(sighing): Look, it’s only a few flirty texts, it doesn’t mean any...
Jessica (interrupting): Don’t you dare say it doesn’t mean anything!! That’s what you said the last time, and look what happened! You know, sometimes I think my mother was right; I should never have married you!
Simon: Ok, Ok I’m sorry!!! (Said in a patronising and sarcastic tone) just don’t bring that bloody mother of yours up again!
Jessica: I just can’t deal with this at the moment, I’m going!!
Simon (sighs): That’s right run off into mummy’s arms; you’ll be back tomorrow... Just like every time.

2nd Scene- Sounds of traffic and footsteps can be heard. Audience hear a dial tone and a ring.
Jessica: Mum, it’s Jess, I’ve finally done it, I’ve left him, and this time it’s for good. I’ll be over at yours within an hour; I just need to pick up a few things, I didn’t have time to pack, I will see you soon, love you, bye. (Hangs up)

3rd Scene- Clock ticking, Audience hear the opening of a door and footsteps.
Simon: Oh it’s you, (tone of voice changes, to a more vulnerable and scared voice) wait... what are you doing?! (Sound of stabbing and then a thud)

4th Scene: Police sirens, loud chattering and the sound of cameras flashing.
Officer: Sir, I can only let police officer’s and DCI’s who contain a pass, through.
DCI Pugh: But I am the DCI!
Officer: Then can you please show some evidence that you are, you could be the killer for all we know.
DCI: Is that an accusation! Look, I don’t normally need a pass to get through you idiot! People tend to know who I am, and if you don’t let me through this instant, I will take any pass I can find and shove it where the sun doesn’t shine! Now let me in before I get angry!
Officer: So this isn’t you getting angry now?
Pugh: This is me annoyed! Quirk!... Quirk!!!
Quirk: Officer this is DCI Pugh and if you don’t let him in now, you’ll get to see what angry looks like.
(Sound of angry mumbling from Pugh.)
Officer: Is he always like this?
Quirk: Only on days ending with a y.
Pugh: Quirk!
Quirk: Crap. Coming! Err sorry about that sir.
Pugh: Enough apologies, just tell me about our stiff friend here
Quirk: That was Mr Rayne, 32, married and by the accounts of his neighbours he’s not a very pleasant man.
Pugh: So a few suspects then?
Quirk: Well, according to the neighbours, a few had it in for the cruel git. And as for the wife... well she wasn’t exactly his number one fan. He did cheat on her repeatedly. Apparently the neighbours have already called her.
Pugh: Yes “hell hath no fury” I suppose. Is that hole through his throat what killed him?
Quirk (feeling very ill): Yes sir it is, however, when analysing the wound, Tomkins mentioned how odd the shape of it was, like it was from a chopstick or something.
Pugh: Or a knitting needle?
(Sounds of fast pacing steps are heard)
Jessica: What the hell is going on here! Simon? Simon?! Let me through! I live here! (Screams) Oh my God!!
Pugh: So, you let her in straight away, brilliant work. Now I have a crying woman on my hands and I can’t stand the sound of women crying especially before breakfast.
Quirk: (shocked) Sir! Mrs Rayne I am sorry, I regret to inform you your husband is...
Pugh: (interrupting) I think she will have noticed Quirk.
Jessica: (sobbing uncontrollably) I shouldn’t have left him... Oh god.
Pugh: I’m sorry for your loss, Jessica isn’t it? I need to ask you a few questions down at the station.

5th Scene- Car doors slamming, Keys jingling, footsteps.
Jessica: (footsteps.) This is ridiculous! Why would I be a suspect?
Pugh: By our accounts he’s cheated on you a few times. Why did you return so early this morning?
Jessica: To collect my things. I had left him the night before.
Quirk: Why did you leave?
Jessica: Because he was cheating on me again.
Pugh: And did that make you angry?
Jessica: Of course it did!
Pugh: Angry enough to make you kill?
Jessica: NO! I was angry sure, but I couldn’t kill him. I loved him.
Quirk: Is that why you forgave him so many times?
Jessica: I suppose.
Pugh: He must have been lucky, a good little wife like you, always taking him back? Maybe you just got sick of him walking all over you, maybe one day you just snapped.
Jessica: I didn’t!!!
Quirk: Where were you last night?
Jessica: At my mother’s
Pugh: All night?
Jessica: Well I stopped off to pick up a few things before I arrived there...
Pugh: For how long?
Jessica: About an hour or so but I don’t see why that matters...
Pugh: Do you knit?
Jessica: W-what?
Pugh: (Repeats calmly) do you knit?
Jessica: What the hell does that have to do with anything?
Pugh: The hole in your husband’s throat (we hear Jessica cry again) was made by a small slender instrument sort of like a chopstick. But as you can see by the tearing...look here (crying again) it is more likely to have been made by a knitting needle.
Jessica: You’re accusing me of killing my husband? How dare you-
Pugh: (interrupting) answer the question please Mrs Rayne.
Jessica: No I don’t, never have.
Pugh: Well, you do have a motive for killing him.
Jessica: No! I couldn’t, I wouldn’t...
Quirk: You don’t sound so sure anymore.
Jessica: I want a lawyer.
Pugh: I think, Mrs Rayne that is wise.

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